Laura:

You have in-depth description of each step you took to discover your identity and this is really good. It enables the reader to see how you examined yourself and the results that came about. In your intro you tell exactly what you are going to do in intricate explanation and I feel that is a bonus because some people forget to inform the reader. I like that you incorporate sources that directly influenced and helped you and quote the most impacting areas from those sources. It seems that your original perception of yourself as a blogger was incorrect and suprisingly mine was of myself as well. You have spot-on sentence fluency and the organization of the paper is overall satisfactory. Good work!

Michael:

After reading your essay I got the notion you have a clear understanding of your topic and you stay within it throughout the essay. Many times you reference the similarity between you and West, as you both are reviewing the identity within blogs. I too found this an imperative aspect of the essay. I appreciated your concluding paragraph when you stated the difference which to you was the ability to have "farther insight." I never really looked at it that way and that would be something you should mention before the conclusion as one of your main points in your comparison to West. There were fragment errors both those are easily fixable and I know you are on your way to writing a great paper. If you would like more extensive comments then feel free to contact me.

Readers Reveiw

You may have already been informed but my power was out until this morning....really unhappy about that. So anybody wanting to reveiw my essay just let me know and I will send it to you I have already spoken to our professor and she is aware of our situation. I need two essays to review myself and would be very appreciative if you guys could sent your drafts to my e-mail. My e-mail is alexaj4@u.washington.edu. Thank you for the understanding of this inconvenience.

State of emergency

My second essay is evolving on paper, but as for electronically I cannot attest to that. My house still has no power and the problem is still unknown. So as it may seem that I could still have done it but I was already well progressed on my home computer. Right now as we speak I am at a freind's house just so I can get this blog done. As soon as my house's power is revuvinated, I will be able to finish it and submit. And when I say finish it that is because I haven't had power since the heavy snow came which didn't allow me proper time to finish it in the first place. If any of you are having this ridiculous problem as well, give me an Amen!

Where I plan to go with my essay

This essay is one in which I will focus on my own identity that I put forth into my weblogs. The sources I have found are really helpful. West's article demonstrates how to study identity and logic in blogs and its importance. However, I found an even bette source that pertains to my essay. A site with a blogger named Yang who works for BBC; and Yang posts on the importance of blogging on his life and the people that inhabit society. I have found that blogging is a huge fad and will continue to become increasingly popular. Through looking at my blog, I have found that most of my posts stick to the criteria and inform. I tend to remove myself from going in-depth on what impacts me. I am trying to change this habit as I feel that using identtiy will better represent who I am as a person.

Relations Made

There are many relations to Kathleen C. West's article and my essay as they both illustrate identity through the analysis of blog posts. Within my own blog posts I will be examining my writing and initially uncovering my personal identity. Applying what West mentioned and provided throughout her article, such as the table of the three chosen students, and the results of each, will guide me through my process of self identity. The three relations she expressed the most that will become a useful tool in my opinion will be the discussion of the literate verse the casual side of the student and the idea of the serious student. This is because in the end I will eventually categorize myself.

West's Essay compared to essay 2

West's essay outlined the importance of identity in blogging. West intricately covered the topic and directly linked identity with three students. The background information helped me to visualize what a good foundation is to set your paper up. I really appreciated the fact that it was relayed on how each student used academic rationality and logic, yet incorporated modern day lingo from the younger generation. As a result of the essay, I was able to infer that identity was shown in opposing ways by each student yet the support and detail remained one focused on sholarly detail. This essay is a huge help. I know what I have to do for essay 2, and this essay is a format I will closely relate with. If you think about it, West follows the same format but goes much more in depth on certain points such as background information and her coverage of each student. I could see the voice in the essay as well as relate with each of the students. Being able to connect with the examples in the essay demonstrated the importance of a successful essay and how to make yourself relatable. I have a lot of work to do, but this essay will really help.

the article and how it impacted me

The article we were assigned to read goes in depth on the literary technique and identity exuding from the blogs of three documented students. The author goes in depth and reveals a hybrid of academic logic and detail infused with modern day lingo used by the younger generation. This article really hit home because I too studied the identity of a blogger and could relate on many different points. The article really works as a guide as it is a topic similar to mine that studies more than one blogge and the impact of identity. I like the fact that each student was covered extensively and related with the other students. This author really investigated the topic and it was revealed how all students used appropriate school-taught rationality yet connected linguistically in different ways. It just really solidifies the fact that identity can be visible through many different techniques; yet all are effective in their own way.

Essay One and its impact

Essay One vastly helped me to grow as a writer. I gained experience not only on the writing process, but also in the discovery of how to spot identity and the impact identity has on the people it is relayed to. Now that my first essay is done, the second essay will be easier to right. I look foward to the second opportunity to hone my skills and really impact my audience through the text. Another majow focal point that was improved was my overall concept of blogging. Before this essay and the book, I had absolutely minimal knowledge on what blogging is and how it creats impact. Now, I realize that blogging is a valuable tool that enables one to connect to a wide audience through the internet. It is a modernized communication on the social media that allows any type of person with any type of message to relay facts, or what they feel. This essay was definitely beneficial.

They say i say

This book will be a great way for me to enahance my paper. Through reading this book, I will be able to have a better grasp of my topic and thus be able to add supporting detail in my paper directly from the book. This is beneficial for me.

presentation

I feel I did well in my presentation. I made eye contact, focused on both the blog and the paper, and relayed to my piers the stage in which my research is. It was a good experience for me to get this opportunity to present and I feel my paper will be stronger as a result.