Michael:

After reading your essay I got the notion you have a clear understanding of your topic and you stay within it throughout the essay. Many times you reference the similarity between you and West, as you both are reviewing the identity within blogs. I too found this an imperative aspect of the essay. I appreciated your concluding paragraph when you stated the difference which to you was the ability to have "farther insight." I never really looked at it that way and that would be something you should mention before the conclusion as one of your main points in your comparison to West. There were fragment errors both those are easily fixable and I know you are on your way to writing a great paper. If you would like more extensive comments then feel free to contact me.